Descriptive Writing

Hi,
This week we had scientists come and observe our class room and how we work  on our computers.
When they were here we did some writing using our five senses.
We had to use descriptive language and adjectives.

I chose a photo of a waterfront and  here is my writing:

There were stones slithering through my feet like a snake.Animals calling my name like prisoners.

It looks like the old rickety bridge is going to collapse. The wind tastes like old rotten fish. The current was as strong as one million soldiers pushing me along.